Figurative Language Revision "Life is Precious"

Author's Note: This is for my figurative language piece. I took one of my previous writing pieces, from September 27, and put some figurative language into the writing piece. I will include an original piece below.

Revised Piece

Life is precious, it shouldn't be wasted.  You only get one chance to live, and you have to live it to the fullest. People all over the world have different points of view from their own lives.  There are bulky names like Tom Brady or Brittany Spears. But then you look on the other side of the spectrum where you have people in Africa walking five miles to carry a bucket of water on their head for their family. There are many points of view, but no matter what the circumstances, you have to live it to the fullest.

Most people who live in Africa don’t have enough money to even afford a shelter or food. Yet even with the rough conditions, they still find a way to make their life the best they could possibly have. African natives typically have to walk more than three miles to get their water for the day. At first it doesn't feel that bad, but after a while, the weight that was a bucket turns into an elephant. Yet they enjoy it and never give up. Americans don’t generally think about how much we use a water fountain or a sink, how much we could be saving people in our own community, how much we could be saving someone else around the world.

Besides people in poverty, there are many who live right here in the United States that are in severe occasions such as cancer or blood disorder. There was a ten year old boy named Jack that lived in the Southeastern part of Wisconsin, and he was diagnosed with cancer when he was three. He fought cancer for seven years, but the doctors ran out of ways to treat the young boy. So with no more options, they thought it would be best if they let him move on. The boy did not cry or sob when he heard the news, he simply said “I want to live the rest of my life in peace.” It's like a basketball team, even though they might be down 25, if the team is strong they will keep fighting. Sometimes they win, sometimes they lose. Jack passed away on August 28, 2012 when he was ten, and he will always be remembered for his courage.

With all the harsh conditions that the world brings us today, it’s hard to imagine how to make a life out of these rough statuses. That just proves that life can be lived with joy and peace, it’s just what you make of it. If you decide to throw in the towel and lay down for a nap, you will miss everything good about life itself. If you decide to watch your life, everything will be gone in a matter of time. Life is delicate, and you only have an short period of time till you leave this earth. It's your life, not anybody elses, so don't watch, LIVE.

Original Piece

Life is precious, it shouldn't be wasted.  You only get one chance to live, and you have to live it to the fullest. People all over the world have different points of view from their own lives.  There are bulky names like Tom Brady or Brittany Spears. But then you look on the other side of the spectrum where you have people in Africa walking five miles to carry a bucket of water on their head for their family. There are many points of view, but no matter what the circumstances, you have to live it to the fullest.

Most people who live in Africa don’t have enough money to even afford a shelter or food. Yet even with the rough conditions, they still find a way to make their life the best they could possibly have. African natives typically have to walk more than three miles to get their water for the day. That’s like carrying a three pound bucket of water for six miles. Yet they enjoy it and never give up. Americans don’t generally think about how much we use a water fountain or a sink, and how much we could be saving someone else around the world.

Besides people in poverty, there are many who live right here in the United States that are in severe occasions such as cancer or blood disorder. There was a ten year old boy named Jack that lived in the Southeastern part of Wisconsin, and he was diagnosed with cancer when he was three. He has been fighting cancer for seven years, but the doctors ran out of ways to treat the young boy. So with no more options, they thought it would be best if they let him move on. The boy did not cry or sob when he heard the news, he simply said “I want to live the rest of my life in peace.” Jack passed away on August 28, 2012 when he was ten, and he will always be remembered for his courage.

With all the harsh conditions that the world brings us today, it’s hard to imagine how to make a life out of these rough statuses. That just proves that life can be lived with joy and peace, it’s just what you make of it. Life is delicate, and if you make the most out of life, you’ll be overjoyed too.